Tuesday, October 18, 2011

REVISION OF CATW1

          How would you fill if you had to pay more for colleges-universities if you are an immigrant who is living in the u.s international (who pay taxes) compared to people who are living in the u.s illegally. Isn't that being rewarded for doing wrong? From an excerpted from "An Education in Citizenship" Chicago tribune Illinois house recently passed a bill that allows young people in the u.s illegally to pay in-state tuition rates at Illinois colleges and universities . I do not speak for myself when i say everything that the government is doing should go by the law which to me should define people citizenship's and rights. If the government is not going to go by its own immigration laws maybe their laws should change. But until that day comes no law should not be over looked at anytime. This article makes a point that i agree strongly with "This nation sorely needs to reform its complex, often-unenforced immigration laws. But until that day comes, it cannot blithely ignore those laws".
            If the government doesn't follow its own laws (the structure that this country was made on) why should we as the people of the u.s follow the laws that is given to us. No law should just be tossed aside an over looked at anytime. I was told in Phoenix's Arizona cops are able to stop any pedestrian and ask them for their green card or documentaion to prove that they are legal residents there. furthermore if this is happending in arizona why aren't they doing this though out the rest of the u.s. Why wasn't a law passed for cops to do this everywhere but instead a law was passed to allow illegal immigrants to go to school free. It is more reasonable to be in the contry legally and Illinois senators have not consider this.
        The in-state and out-state tuition gap in Illinois is absurd. Students who wish to go to colleges or universities in Illinois who are not from the state or Illinois must pay a tuition rate of $13,906. As for people who are residents of Illinois only pay a fee of $5,302. As you can see the gap between tuitions is unreasonable .I am a student at lagudia community college in longisland city queens who planes to go away to suny delhi next semester.After reading about the tuition diffrence between in-state and out-state tuition fees in Illinois im wondering is it like that with every college or universitie and if it is how is that going to effect me and my education.
             The facts and opinons that i stated support my point of veiw that if the government is not going to follow the rules then why should we the citizens of the u.s follow the rules that are layed out for us. No one should be taken away from a education.When you are doing something wrong you should not be rewarded for it. Walking over immigration laws or any law in genareal would not be a wise move to make. These laws should be taken with a more fouceful approch. Tuition rates weather in-state or out-state should be equal or fair for everybody. No one should be deprived from a good education.

2 comments:

  1. (: Hello, I'm here to read your essay and comment on it and see if it's passing or not, this is just my opinion so don't take it the wrong way.
    Your essay overall is good. The points you stated where very good, and I understand where your coming from when you say "everything that the government is doing should go by the law which to me should define people citizenship and rights". I don't think is passing yet because you have a few mistakes here and there that you can fix.
    You have the general idea of the essay down, but there are grammatical errors. The intro was very good, you had the name of the article and you gave your opinion too. I didn't see the examples on your essay, you had a lot of facts which is good but you still need the examples. Your doing good, just need to fix somethings and when you do you will have a passing essay.

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  2. Hello,
    After I read both your original CATW practical and its revised one, I can tell your really made changes. First of all, the original practice didn't have an intoductory sentence. It also supposed to have a summary and a clear thesis, but it did not. However, the revised one has a nice introductory sentence, a good summary, and a clear thesis.
    Concerning the body paragraphs, the significant idea that I think you choose "if the government is not going to follow the rules then why should we the citizens of the u.s follow the rules that are layed out for us" was clearly stated and I think you choose the right Also the Arizona' example was a good evidence to develop your chosen idea.
    A few grammar mistakes that need work.

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