Revision of CATW exam, Practice 3

If you ever felt depressed or you wanted to get excited before your big game then you know that music will always put you in the place you want to be. Adapted from “How and why is music a good tool for health?” by Elizabeth Scott this article states that “research has shown that music has a profound effect on your body and mind. I fill that I’m not the only person who would strongly agree with the point “music can bring lasting effects to your body and mind”.

        I seen on TV that music therapy can help bring down high blood pressure, and known to help with sleeping disorders. Although it wasn’t said that music therapy can cure diseases but it is known to help with other problems with the body. Music therapy helps the healing process of the body and for some patients it helps improve their way of life. Although music therapy can not cure cancer but it is known to help reduce pain.

My grandma servers from a numerous amount of problems with her body. So she’s often in pain. Whenever my family and I go to visit her I notice that her tape player is always near her.  Besides when her family is with her I believe the happiest she is, is when she is listening to her music.  After reading this article “How and why is music a good tool for health?”  it only has me wondering is the reason why my grandmother is at her happiest only when she is listen to her music only because her body is in less pain? It could be the music is unconsciously aiding the healing of her body.

Music would always put you in the right state of mind there is a song for almost every situation. Soon music will be the new therapy. Music has many benefits besides listing to your favorite song. From help cancer patients, children with attention disorder and can even bring you out of depression it can also keep your anxiety down.

Blog 6: Personal Directions for The CATW

     

        The day of the test or any test you must make sure you read the instructions that are usually above the passage I would use my pencil to guide the instructions so you can understand better. Read the passage 3 times then skim through the passage the 4th time. The first two times is for you to read and understand what the passage is talking about and for you to understand everything the passage is saying. The third time reading the passage is for you to underline the main idea, and supporting details. The last time you just want to skim through the passage to see if there are any supporting details you may forgot. After doing this take a min or two to do some free writing just so you can get some ideas in your head about the topic.

          Now when writing your essay it must consist or four or more paragraph. Make sure you start off with a great introduction that draws the attention of the reader (this is very important).  The intro must have an opening sentences follow by the main idea of the passage then the source of the passage and the author of the article. Then whether you agree or disagree with one of the points made in the passages (make sure the point that you agree/disagree with is exactly as it is written in the passage in exhumation marks).  When starting your body paragraphs you must explain why you agree with the point made. This is usually done by using an example that supports what you agree/disagree with. Use one example per body paragraph and you must have supporting details. In your examples you will be looked at weather the example you used is a good example and backs up your decision and is it believable. It is better if your example came from a source like an article you have read but if not you can always make up an example   but it has to be believable. Your supporting detail can come from personal experience Last you want to end your essay as strong as you started your essay. You want to use a good opening and state dis is why you strongly agree/disagree with the point you stated.

          Once you are done you must read your own essay the same amount of times as you read the article. This is because you make a lot of spelling and grammar errors when you write. So you want to make sure you go over each line of your essay. Everybody makes mistakes with spelling but you make mistakes on words that are already in the passage and the test readers can fail you just off that. So read through your essay 4 to 5 times. Also your developments of your paragraphs are okay but they can always be better.  Put only details that will support you. You will lose points if you put unnecessary details in your body paragraphs so make sure this does not happened. Use examples from articles if you can or personal experience and make up examples if and only if you cannot use other examples. Stay more focus on the task and do not let your mind drift off stay awake.

          Because you make a huge amount of spelling errors bring a dictionary with you the day of the test this will help you spell words you forgot to spell and it will help you use words that you want to use. Use more transition words this will help to improve the development of your essay and it makes your essay sound good. The day before the test make sure you get plenty of rest so you won’t be tired when taking the test. Eat breakfast the day of the test as well so it will keep your mind going.

CATW PRACTICE 3

If you ever felt depressed or you wanted to get excited before your big game then you know that music will always put you in the place you want to be. Adapted from “How and why is music a good tool for health?” by Elizabeth Scott this article states that “research has shown that music has a profound effect on your body and mind. I fill that I’m not the only person who would strongly agree with the point “music can bring lasting effects to your body and mind”.

            March 5^th of 2011 I was shot in my neck coming from a friends sweet 16^th birthday party. this was just days away from starting my second semester of college .I was rushed to the trauma clinic at Jacobi hospital was lucky enough to still be alive, and in was told by almost every doctor that I seen that not everybody lives off a shot to the neck like I did. I just couldn’t stop replaying that night and what happened to me in my head. This made it hard for me to sleep. Even with my family and friends by my side I couldn’t help being scared and depressed. I was never told by my doctors about music therapy but when I was released from the hospital all I wanted to do was shut out the world and music helped me do this. My music is probably the only reason why I’m not stressed out and fill sad. Music is what brought me out of my depression and kept me with a positive state of mind.

            I am a manager at a small company at Yankee stadium. One of my main jobs there is to make cotton candy. It takes a few hours for me to make cotton candy since I’m making it for the whole stadium so I’m allowed to listen to my iPod while I’m doing so. I have a specific playlist which only contains fast song. This is because I notice the faster and exciting the song is the faster I finish the bored of cotton candy. Before I knew this I would always ask myself how come I finish some boards of cotton candy faster than others. Until it hit me the faster the song the more concentrated I was the slower the song the more mellow and calm I would be.

                        Music would always put you in the right state of mind there is a song for almost every situation. Soon music will be the new therapy. Music has many benefits besides listing to your favorite song. From help cancer patients, children with attention disorder and can even bring you out of depression it can also keep your anxiety down.

Blog # 5

This movie had a lot of different point of views. Everybody thought they  knew what was best for the little girl Amanda and wanted to help. Police Captain, Remy, and Lionel believe in Consequentialism. They felt that stealing the little girl and giving her a better life was the right thing to do in their eyes .Police captain Remy and Lionel wanted to do the right thing but their hearts wasn’t in the right place, their priorities wrongs. Captain Remy wanted the little girl because he lost his daughter to kidnapping and sought to give the little girl a better life. When Patrick went to the captains house to confront him the captain try’s to tell him if you see or knows what he knows from years of working on the force then he would understand why he is doing what he is doing. He wanted to spread happiness and relieve suffering this is why he believes in consequentialism. Lionel was in it for the money at first  but when things didn’t go his way the plan changed. He wanted to keep everything a secret but slipped up once he told Patrick that he knew Amanda’s uncle.

                                Patrick and Angie also have different looks on the situation. Patrick believed in morality                that you must respect law; follow your duty, to do the right thing, and to not go against god. This is why when he shot the child molester in the back of his head he felt guilty and shameful. He said “if you fill ashamed that’s just god way of saying you did something wrong”. Furthermore this is the reason he gave back Amanda to her mother. Angie felt the same way as captain Remy and Lionel did but without the conspiracy. She wanted Patrick to just forget about it and act like he did not know the captain had Amanda. She also gave him an ultimatum which was she would not stay with him if he called the cops. She knew that Amanda would have a better life if she would have stayed with the captain and his family instead of her mother (which did drugs).  

                I felt that this movie didn’t really take any sides it just showed the viewers that doing the right thing is always the answer but how do we know what the right thing is. Patrick knew that calling the cops to pick up Amanda was his duty. But at the end of the movie when he is in Amanda’s mother’s house you begin to wonder is he now questioning his actions. He knew giving this little girl back to her mother was the right thing to do but was it the best thing to do in the long wrong. Captain Remy and Lionel were doing the wrong things for a good reason.  Everybody thought they was doing the right thing but how would they know what’s the right thing for sure?